tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3978947499777787671.post2902370841452113054..comments2023-12-22T05:14:59.944-05:00Comments on Buffy's write zone: Ella's Dance openingBuffy Andrewshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07033283884801658206noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3978947499777787671.post-56940045066559927592010-02-07T13:29:37.841-05:002010-02-07T13:29:37.841-05:00I like that much better. TTYL...I think I'll ...I like that much better. TTYL...I think I'll be off-line until the <br />14th.Sharon K. Mayhewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07799235347319851345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3978947499777787671.post-48545574732083958302010-02-07T10:09:08.829-05:002010-02-07T10:09:08.829-05:00I see your point, but Ella is angry. I think the f...I see your point, but Ella is angry. I think the fact that she would not normally swear and does here tells us something about that anger. I could easily take it out and I don't think lose anything, so I will definitely consider that. I could switch to:<br />She planned everything like it was a picnic, and Ella hated her for it.<br /> <br />Thanks Sharon for your thoughts as always. You're awesome:)Buffy Andrewshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07033283884801658206noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3978947499777787671.post-10925608538258025132010-02-07T01:48:40.535-05:002010-02-07T01:48:40.535-05:00Okay, Buffy, we are e-friends, right? I was reall...Okay, Buffy, we are e-friends, right? I was really shocked when Ella said, "damn." You know I've been reading your exerpts for quite a while...It just doesn't feel right, unless Ella is going to have some sort of dramatic change in behavior. I love everything else...just the swear word doesn't seem to fit....<br /><br />Have a great week. I'm going to be unplugged after tomorrow morning. (Yes, it's gonna be wierd.)Sharon K. Mayhewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07799235347319851345noreply@blogger.com