Thursday, May 20, 2010

Writing exercise on voice

Rewrite this sentence and give it a different voice. This is from my WIP THE LION AWAKENS. Petra is the MC’s wing girl. She’s funny, and when she talks it’s like she has diarrhea of the mouth.


“Oh. My. Gawd.” Petra said. “Is that a for real baby? Like one you have to feed and burp and change diapers and rock and…”

2 comments:

  1. Petra - funny girl with the VERBAL TROTS:

    "Oh, YUK! LOOK - it's moving and doing bottom burps from its mouth and bottom burps from its bottom at the same time! How does it DO that???"

    BUFFY - I seem to be writing a lot about POO + PUKE + PEE the last few weeks so I tried NOT to include these actual words - rather I attempted the subtle approach so as to avoid being labelled
    A M? Oh she's a POO-DE-PHILE.

    NOT good for one's career......

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  2. R U KIDDING ME?

    Guess WHICH word I was requested to type in order for my poo comment to be published???

    arsin...

    I swear to God!

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